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no_way
05-15-2006, 05:19 PM
It used to be the "Want the shirt" thread started by OOPS, but some people asked to close that thread because it was off-topic. So here's the thing, if you ever composed a lyric, a poem or a philosofical thought (whatever), post it here, share it with us!!!

no_way
05-15-2006, 05:21 PM
I'll start myself. I wrote this song so long ago...

"No, not fair,
I look out my window and see
all those happy people laughing at life

No, not fair,
sometimes I just want to
yell at life and spit and sky and stay in bed forever

no not fair
all the things that you were saying
all the crap you squizzed in my head
every silly thing that I believe...
Stay away for a while,
i need to think about it
i wanna weep for this
i wanna jump into a risk...
not fair..."

Mr. Noodles
05-15-2006, 05:22 PM
I once was bored enough and liked a show enough to write a parody of Me And My Old Lady. I can only remember the parody chorus at the moment.

Andy
05-15-2006, 05:26 PM
I wrote a Christmas parody of Weezer's My Name Is Jonas. To fit with the festive theme I called it My Name Is Jesus. If I can remember the lyrics I'll post them up.

Oh, I also wrote a parody of I Wanna Be On TV. It was about transvetitism (I Wanna Be A TV).

Sinister
05-15-2006, 05:28 PM
I've written some song lyrics, they're currently saved in a dark corner of the hard drive on my old computer which is now screenless, I'll have to see if I can reach them through my nifty local-area network.

sk8ter-hater
05-15-2006, 05:33 PM
I came upon a great topic just yesternight. I will try to pin up Stephen F. Austin (some texan hero) against the nazi dinosaur-riding south americans. I cannot come up with a starting word at the moment.

JoY
05-15-2006, 05:38 PM
something I wrote about three years ago. you're fully allowed to laugh.

the Dance

So immobile
She sits motionless
Silent and fragile
Taking a deep breath
She closes her eyes
Reality’s curtain falls
To let imaginary’s rise
World without walls
Unlimited, fully wide
Her soul set free
Like the eternal tide
Of an immeasurable sea

Reason’s suicide
Complete ability
Touched by bright spotlight
She stands up slowly

Careful movements
Of elegance and grace
One with the elements
The melody plays
For her, only for her
For endless moments
She is her own dancer
Reaching out her hands
A dramatic motion
Drawn to the ground
Filled with devotion
To the fading sound

Left in the dark, curtains gone
Slowly again aware
Lying on the cold stone
Tumbled over wheelchair


as for a song, this has a melody, but I can't write it down or anything for you, because it's in my head. it's jazzy, just meaningless, for fun. also this was written about three years ago, so again you're allowed to laugh at me as much as you want.

velvet black dress

she was a real lady
in her velvet black dress
with her high heels
and pack of cigarettes

she owned the world
she wasn't just a girl
all grown up classy
with her string of pearls

and her look
gave you that well known thrill
her presence
caused a pleasant chill
her teasing kiss
blown from her lips
her sexy walk
the way she shakes her hips

she's sipping cocktails
on a terras in fall
with her bright red nails
oh she's got it all

with her dark sunglasses
on a rainy day
stunning eyelashes
got to love her way

and her look
gave you that well known thrill
her presence
caused a pleasant chill
her teasing kiss
blown from her lips
her sexy walk
the way she shakes her hips

one more, because I'll just forget about these otherwise:

Collector of sins

Angel darling
I intensely love your life
Little sweetheart
You live it perfectly right
You follow every law
Excluding all your own
Their justice is in your heart
Your body and your bones
I fail to cope with
Their rules and obligations
Slowly but surely
It infests like an obsession
It colours me deeply
underneath my skin
I went for innocence and stamps
But I’m a collector of sins

Holy mighty
God in the sky
Only you could save me
But you know I’d deny
You’ve read in the books
I’m not exactly a saint
You know that I am hopeless
I won’t be restraint
Sorry to disappoint
It’s this habit I have
I warned you before
I’m not worth your time
I’m simply too stubborn to accept
What conflicts with what’s within
My heart isn’t black and evil
I’m just a collector of sins

embarrassing, but funny. & kinda cute in a way, looking back. ;D *giggles @ self* I just have piles of this kind of trash.

no_way
05-15-2006, 05:43 PM
that's really good, i likes the first one best, almost sounds like something Dexter could write :D

JoY
05-15-2006, 05:44 PM
*scratches head* ...are you trying to insult me in the most painful way ever?

no_way
05-15-2006, 05:47 PM
*scratches head* ...are you trying to insult me in the most painful way ever?

haha, i knew you'd take that the wrong way.. I'm not sarcastic, I really really liked it. Dexter... wouldn't write it... if that makes you happy

JoY
05-15-2006, 05:48 PM
ah yes, it does. *grins* thank you, glad you like it.

XYlophonetreeZ
05-15-2006, 05:51 PM
When I was 17 I wrote a mock-metal song called Missile Streich. Here it is.

Sleep softly my angel, I'll return home someday
I'll find my way back, this is not Enola Gay
You'll be in my heart and my thoughts and my prayers
You won't have to pass my land down to my heirs
I'll pray through the nights 'til the winter is over
I'll pray through the nights whether drunken or sober
For I, I know the reason why
Hearts live on, though men may die...

(Song gets RIDICULOUSLY LOUD HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)

Running across the embers,
The nights are cold and dark in December
Unpredictable things that we cannot see
The bombs are now falling steadily,
Citizens scramble for shelter so readily
The man in the plane- my darling that man is me

MISSILE STREICH!
There's gonna be a missile strike
Against the people we don't like
Telling our enemies to take a hike
MISSILE STREICH!
And when the fire has ended,
Watching the enemy fall will be splendid
Souls that are broken and never shall be mended
MISSILE STREICH!

Baby that's all she wrote
The captain said "smite" and all were smote
In a city of wreckage with no place to go
Protecting my brethren relentlessly
Bombing the crap out of people repentlessly
What will become of their souls? We may never know

I am a man
I have a plan
I will go crazy defending my land,
Marching in line,
Marching through time,
Marching for sake of the greater mankind

(Repeat chorus)

(Repeat bridge)

no_way
05-15-2006, 05:53 PM
Once again, this has been on the 'Want the shirt' thread...

hell here it is

Not Fair
Why???
Why me???
I look out my window
And see all those happy people laughing at life

No!!!
Not fair!!!
Sometimes I just want to
Yell at life and spit at sky and stay in bed for ever…

Tell…
Me why??
Tell me when I won’t trip over,
tell me when it won’t be so…
Unfair…

No!!!!!!
Not fair!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Everything that you were saying
All the crap you squeezed in my head
Every silly thing that I believed…
Stay away for a while
I need to think about it
I wanna weep for it
I wanna jump into a risk…
Not fair…

no…
don’t feel!!!
don’t feel answers coming to my-
I just feel these questions going threw my head..
yeah…
that’s it
I’m over of being here
Here alone with all my feelings
Talking these walls

No!!!!!!
Not fair!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Everything that you were saying
All the crap you squeezed in my head
Every silly thing that I believed…
Stay away for a while
I need to think about it
I wanna weep for it
I wanna jump into a risk…

Yeah,
So what?
I don’t talk and you don’t hear me
I don’t think this way is better,
Gotta walk away…

Gotta walk away

OOPS
05-15-2006, 05:58 PM
When to me there was 17 that I has written this song!
This that I have written the first, and after that I have solved that I shall become the musician and the poet!



All punks get in paradise

The first couplet

You have died, you are not present more
To you of only 16 years
The world is similar to an ant hill
All people search the big money
You will bury and will forget for ever
But for us you are alive, alive in our hearts

Refrain

You look at them through dead eyes
On your cheek dead tear flows
Now you see this world on through
And nobody to help you with forces

The second couplet

You depart in anywhere
Heart has hidden in dream
Your body lays
On the cold ground
Die more soon and forget you about that
That there will be no you in this world another's

Refrain

Prologue

They can regret you now
In fact it is not necessary to you to look in eyes
Grey people for a long time have forgotten about honour
In their souls it is a lot of flattery and revenge
When you are dead, they can tell much
But recollect, you were alive
And on you was all to spit

The third couplet

You now understand
As the grass is fine
The wind corrects you
The freshness is given with winter
You depart there where
Lost paradise
Only old friends do not forget

The world has remained same
Cheap and malicious
If you are not similar
The derelict means

JoY
05-15-2006, 06:08 PM
I dig your style, XY. isn't it cute, the things we wrote in puberty?

Bloodstains
05-15-2006, 06:09 PM
Song I wrote when I was feeling a bit depressed about a buncha shit going on with my family.

DEATH AND REJECTION

I'm standing on the edge
Between this life and another
I don't know what to choose
Torn between death and rejection

This life's a lie
Should I take it now
Or live on?
No one can cry
For what they've lost
Forever

You don't know
How it feels
Or what it's like
Why do you care at all?
I don't know
What is real
Torn between
Death and rejection

I don't know what to do
Can't seem to see the light anymore
Stuck in this darknness
Torn between death and rejection

This life's a lie
Should I take it now
Or live on?
No one can cry
For what they've lost
Forever

You don't know
How it feels
Or what it's like
Why do you care at all?
I don't know
What is real
Torn between
Death and rejection

This life's a lie
No one can cry
The pain inside
Tears us all apart
How can we choose
Between this life
Between death and rejection?

This life's a lie
Should I take it now
Or live on?
No one can cry
For what they've lost
Forever

You don't know
How it feels
Or what it's like
Why do you care at all?
I don't know
What is real
Torn between
Death and rejection

JoY
05-15-2006, 06:18 PM
wow, this reminds me of creepily dark things my mind has produced in more bitter days. I was just browsing through my old files from years back & some of them even manage to scare the shit out of me. now I'll be going to bed with this raised eyebrow & the thought: "what the hell was I thinking?" & "I hope I never let anyone read this dark pile of rubbish". I'm afraid & pretty sure I did, though.

XYlophonetreeZ
05-15-2006, 06:37 PM
I dig your style, XY. isn't it cute, the things we wrote in puberty?
Pah, I had been around the milky way and back when I wrote that. The stuff I actually wrote during puberty? Not so much "cute," as embarrassing.

All About Eve
05-15-2006, 06:39 PM
From the tip of your toung
To the soul of your shoe
In Soviet Russia
Songs write you!

sKratch
05-15-2006, 06:40 PM
For some reason I've reached a stage in my life where I'm unable to appreciate most amature composition, despite my inability to come up with anything decent as of late.

JoY
05-15-2006, 06:44 PM
XY - as I just discovered. oh my god. I'm never going to open this file again, hahaha. I won't post anything depressing, just one to prove again the lameness that's me. which kinda IS depressing.

From here, so far
I think of you
Watching a star
Can you see it, too?
And if so, my love
Would you be
Searching the sky above
Just like me?

& one slightly less embarrassing:

Such a fairy-name
Suiting like a glove
Always in love
Kept in a frame
Crept from a book
A sweet tale
Seemingly frail
Determined look
Lips, as wine so red
Pale face like pearls
Dark hair in curls
Surrounding her head
Thinner than air
Playing with shadows
She comes, goes, no one knows
Was she even there?
Fragile smile
Sparkling eyes
Like a million fire flies
Glowing for a while
Bare feet on cold stone
As she spins around
To the silent sound
She dances alone
In moonlight
Stars bleached, faded
Sun by concurrence jaded
Tonight is her night
Like liquid,
A light breeze
She can’t be seized
Her movements so rapid
They’re hard to follow
Yet if you look closely
You can clearly see
She’s moving slow
Lost in her dance
Lost her wings
Lost a million things
Throwing a glance
Towards the sky
That pulls her under
Drowned her
Drawn up high
Fallen back in the grass
Arms spread wide
Devoted Moon’s bride
Eyes like glass
Dress off white
With now green stains
It softly rains
But that’s alright
Caught in beauty
Now, forever
Her soft laughter
Sweet sweet Lilly

omgz sucha poet!!!11

All About Eve
05-15-2006, 06:46 PM
I used to take existing poems and put new words to the same flow, but I can't find any of them. If I remember, I did a really good one of Ickle Me, Pickle Me, Tickle Me Too by Shel Silverstein.

JoY
05-15-2006, 06:50 PM
For some reason I've reached a stage in my life where I'm unable to appreciate most amature composition, despite my inability to come up with anything decent as of late.
I can't say I've 'written', or have even tried to write anything as of late. the last thing I came up with was two years ago & reading back, the little inspiration I ever had from being an extremely moody teenager was well dried up then. my goodness. things just don't get any worse. (although.. I've seen examples) however, I fail.

Andy
05-15-2006, 06:52 PM
I wish I could write poems and songs and such. I just find it impossible to put my feelings down on paper. I find it hard enough to tell friends for heavens' sake.

JoY
05-15-2006, 06:56 PM
...it's not like anyone I know in real life has ever had the displeasure of reading these things, babe.

OOPS
05-15-2006, 06:59 PM
I wish I could write poems and songs and such. I just find it impossible to put my feelings down on paper. I find it hard enough to tell friends for heavens' sake.


It was always difficult!
But when you have written many songs and many verses you feel that you are free! It is free from itself, for the fears and oppressions and you to spit that others will tell!

0r4ng3
05-15-2006, 07:48 PM
Some lyrics I wrote a month or so ago, for a guitar part I wrote a few days prior. Whoever knows my MySpace already probably saw it. The song is called "Drifting". In my head, it sounds a lot like "Peaceful Day" by Pennywise.

(verse 1)
Every day it feels like
I've lost all faith in everything
So why do I wake up,
If this all seems so never-ending

I'd do what I want
But I don't know what I want to do
It's some kind of boredom
and I don't think I'll make it through

(chorus)
Too tired of life
but not ready to die
I don't know the answers
but I don't ever want to ask why

So I'll just keep drfting
Without a purpose yet
Living with nothing
Soon a chapter that I'll forget

(verse 2)
It's a vicious cycle
Wake up, go to sleep, rinse, repeat
Do you think it's ever gonna end
No signs of escape, no signs of retreat

I feel like nothing,
It feels a lot like monotony
I wonder what it's like to feel
Some of that precious autonomy

(chorus)
(bridge - still in progress)
(chorus)

All About Eve
05-15-2006, 07:50 PM
My problem is I don't have any good ideas. If someone would give me an idea I could maybe think of something, or give me a song and an idea to make a parody out of.

Andy
05-15-2006, 07:51 PM
...it's not like anyone I know in real life has ever had the displeasure of reading these things, babe.
I meant that I find it impossible to do anything with feelings. I'm a bottler, I have no, er, release.

I'll probably end up going on some manic killing spree because of it.
Serenity Now!

sKratch
05-15-2006, 08:19 PM
On another note, I think lyrics which are mediocre at best on their own, come to life much more when they are to music. This isn't in response to anything, because I'm too big of a douche to read anything anyone wrote.

0r4ng3
05-15-2006, 08:20 PM
I completely agree. When I put my lyrics to the guitar parts I wrote for it, it sounds like the best thing ever. Without music, it just looks like some shitty poem.

JoY
05-16-2006, 01:30 AM
I meant that I find it impossible to do anything with feelings. I'm a bottler, I have no, er, release.

I'll probably end up going on some manic killing spree because of it.
Serenity Now!
/ranttt:
I sometimes have too much release. I'm such an emotional wuss these days.
I used to have no release, absolutely none. complete bottler. I knew people that told me every single dark thought that popped up in their minds, who told me everything about their troubled & messed up minds. & I thought I could basically handle everything, untill I messed up at some point, because everything was too much & there was too much of everything. I kind of snapped & lost control. first I tried listening to ubersad songs, hoping something would bubble to the surface & I would snap in the right way. then I tried this, writing shit. eventually I started on a diary, which normally definitely isn't my thing. in the end I things got so much better, one & a half year ago, that I forgot all about my diary & just let it go & basically moved on. I even told my best friend about the stupid shit I'd pulled & she was fantastic about it. I definitely prefer being an emotional wuss, than recognising an emotion from somewhere, but being unable to place it & deal with it, because it's far too tucked away & out of reach.

anyway, I shouldn't tell so much about myself. *grins*

JoY
05-16-2006, 01:34 AM
On another note, I think lyrics which are mediocre at best on their own, come to life much more when they are to music. This isn't in response to anything, because I'm too big of a douche to read anything anyone wrote.
I agree. the jazzy tune for 'velvet black dress' makes up for absolute shallowness & simpleness of the lyrics. but still I prefer when the lyrics hit you just as hard as the melody & when they both form a combination to blow your mind.

no_way
05-16-2006, 01:16 PM
well, actually lyrics used to be poems before, now they can put anything and miz it with a great hook, and a song comes out. There are a few ppl that write good lyrics

Bloodstains
05-16-2006, 03:12 PM
Wrote this one lasat twelve o' clock midnight (last night). Looking back at it, I think I may have been drunk or something, 'cause it's really stupid.

You don't speak
I don't listen
You can't see
Beyond your own vision
It's hard to think
Hard to envision
I don't know
What's this mission

(refrain)
I don't know and you don't know
Who knows what this means at all
Is this world really insane
Or is it just me?

The sky caves in
The oceans float up
To far beyond
Whatever's up there
The cats survive
The dogs all perish
I guess kanine
Domination is over

(refrain)

This is crazy
In a world of
Bright sinshine
With laughing children
So what is the
Meaning to life?
How should I know
Don't ask me
I'm lost inside a fantasy
My escape from reality

You don't speak
So I don't listen
And you can't see
Beyond my vision
Will cats survive
While dogs all perish
'Cause then kanine
Domination would be over

no_way
05-16-2006, 03:37 PM
Wrote this one lasat twelve o' clock midnight (last night). Looking back at it, I think I may have been drunk or something, 'cause it's really stupid.


yep, you must have been drunk... or maybe you're just not goos at this and you can't admit it.. think 'bout it

Bloodstains
05-16-2006, 03:44 PM
yep, you must have been drunk... or maybe you're just not goos at this and you can't admit it.. think 'bout it
I've written better stuff, I admit that was stupid as crap. I don't think I'm that great at writing at all, but I've been told that I am. It confuses the shit out of me. I'm only good at writing songs when I'm depressed.

no_way
05-16-2006, 03:52 PM
I've written better stuff, I admit that was stupid as crap. I don't think I'm that great at writing at all, but I've been told that I am. It confuses the shit out of me. I'm only good at writing songs when I'm depressed.

it's always that way for me. when i'm happpy, corny silly crappy things come out. When i'm depressed i could compose the shit outta me. another thing that helps me is writing down a FUEL, where you write every single thing about your mind. in my case, i compose with my best friend, so that's what makes it so easy. I've got to share feelings, and when you do that you've got to translate 'em into words, and there you go. Tips for songs

Bloodstains
05-16-2006, 03:54 PM
I couldn't do that, I suck at sharing my feelings with other people unless I can write it down. I also usually drown out depression with Nirvana and Offspring songs (since those are the only two bands that seem to work). It hasn't worked lately, so I've been writing more than usual. It's like depression takes me out of writer's block... strange...

no_way
05-17-2006, 09:06 AM
This sux... it sux bad...



Always about to give in
Then friendship and love cross weird locked up looks
And I set some weak excuse
To bite my tongue and wait till tomorrow

I’m sick of pretending
I’m not who you think I am
I know I just can’t tell you
But I can’t hide it anymore
It’s the first time I ever feel
This could be real
But I’d not only hurt myself
But everyone around me too

Is this a challenge life has put on me?
Now I don’t know wtf to do
Life!!! Why do you do this to me?
You might think it’s funny
Well now let it go
I’m hurt, confused, and this is actually the first time
I don’t know wtf to do…
Oh but it’s so good 4 u
I don’t know wtf to do!!!

no_way
05-17-2006, 09:22 AM
Some lyrics suck viciously... BUT... some are better! I think it's very patchy, it's mostly the end that sucks... The 2nd verse I like a lot, I keep repeating it (in my head & loud)

thank you very much! it's great that someone gets caught by my lyrics :p yes i don't know that i was thinking when i made those lyrics.. well i knew what i was thinking but it doesn't sound good though it's true

Bloodstains
05-18-2006, 05:57 PM
Missing You

I won't miss you when you go
Thought that you might like to know
All the times that you weren't there
Yeah, I knew you never cared

You were never there
Don't think I didn't care
But when you leave this time
I won't be missing you at all

You didn't comfort me when I was sad
You didn't care when I was mad
And this pain I feel, it's all too true
It will be gone, along with you

You were never there
Don't think I didn't care
But when you leave this time
I won't be missing you at all

You'll never try
I'd hoped you'd die
Now I don't care
What happens here
When you are gone
I can carry on
Just know this
I'll never miss you

You were never there
Don't think I didn't care
But when you leave this time
I won't be missing you at all

Missing you at all
Missing you at all

I won't be missing you at all
(dedicated to my dad)

JoY
05-19-2006, 03:18 AM
for some reason I just can't take this seriously. the writing of your own poetry/lyrics, that is. not even the stuff I posted up.

no_way
06-19-2006, 06:21 PM
Do you remember when we swore our selves
We'd always be toghetherand true... I do
Don't you remember when the world was at our feet,
But we weren't strong enough to walk on it

Right... But you don't remember the tears and the pain,
The broken pictures, no, you weren't there!!!
You were not...

It felt so beautiful, I thought it wouldn't end
Every spoken word was the Bible in my head
But forever's a difficult word to take
And so here we are, back to our selves

We didn't stop learning because we're still alive
The time lived yet haven't made us perfect
Still I recognize ingenuity in begginers' lives
No- They don't know it all... And so I don't...

María Eugenia Romero (ME)

calichix
06-30-2006, 09:13 AM
my hair's stained with the scent
of a vacant boy's breath
and nothing is mine
but the skin on my chest

despite this tar-covered wasteland
of homelessness and decay
this trainshop burrito
has just made my day

the road's lined with flowers now
and the sky is bright blue
I can't wait to get home
and make cupcakes with you

the train conductor is jolly
I think you'd like his smile
so I'll count his teeth
when he comes around in a while

that's all I can recall. I wrote my sister a poem on the train. yeech.

no_way
08-01-2006, 01:45 PM
I wrote this song right before I had a terrible argument with a friend. We still don't talk to each other, and I don't think we ever will.

Let me ask you something
That day when you said
We'd be friends forever and ever
What was all that for you?
Did you mean that too?

Remember those times
When you were always there for me
You did say you cared
Everything was fair

Now I'm mad and I'm scared
And don't know what to do
I hate you, I love you
I'm broken in two

Is this us? Is this real?
I don't know how to feel

Well I don't get along with perfection
And you can't take a simple correction
So that's how we are now...
Friends forever...

How funny, friends forever...

I don't wanna lose you...
I don't wanna waste all those empty times
Tell me what to do now
I can't get no turn of time!

I don't get along with perfection
And you can't take a simple correction
So that's how we are now...
Friends forever...

How funny, friends forever...
Isn't that funny?

Friends forever...

no_way
09-12-2006, 12:30 PM
¿De qué sirve la memoria…
… De un recuerdo que no fue?
Si el sol de aquellos días
Es la lluvia que cae hoy

Esta chance se hace nula
No hay más fuerza alrededor
No hace falta que lo diga
Mi veneno es mi dolor

Lastimando sin puñales
Sin palabras ni calor
La distancia mata y quema
El delito no condena
Y todo lo que no pudimos decir
Duerme en el… Silencio…

Deje de buscar tus ojos
En la boca de alguien más
Pues prefiero cuestionarme
¿A qué llamaba yo amor?

Lastimando sin puñales
Sin palabras ni calor
La distancia mata y quema
El delito no condena
Y todo lo que no pudimos decir
Duerme en el… Silencio…

Siempre hay un momento en que todo se aclara
Está todo descifrado, nada tiene un porque sí
Y vuelvo a caer
Acostada otra vez junto a ti
En este duro, duro duro duro… Silencio…

randman21
09-12-2006, 01:25 PM
^My Spanish is crappy, at best, but, what I could make out was awesome. This struck me the most, for some reason:

Y todo lo que no pudimos decir
Duerme en el… Silencio…

I'll post mine a few minutes.

no_way
09-12-2006, 01:37 PM
Haha, thank you, I've been rarely inspired lately, but yes, that's probably the only worthful song I've written in the whole last month. Waiting for yours!

randman21
09-12-2006, 01:45 PM
I've written 91 songs, to date. This is lucky number 85, called "Analogy". Pretty fast. Punk-influenced.


Look at her. Look at him. Uniformity, its finest.
Hope is lost. All is grim. They're lost in orthodoxy and blindness.

Duplicity has claimed their spirit1, now.
They fail to see their own collapse.
If it were up to me, I'd find a way to end all analogy.

Chorus:
That endless, empty space that is our whole entire race is gonna fall (and analogy is the cause)2.
No turning back, when everyone around is exactly you. (Who-oa!3)

Look at him. Look at her: Homogeny, in every fashion.
Their lives are all one big blur with no capacity to imagine.

They go unfazed by big and small alike.
They're in a daze, dead to their plight.
If they could only see what lies ahead, they'd end all analogy.

That endless, empty space that is our whole entire race is gonna fall (and analogy is the cause).
No turning back, when everyone around is exactly you. (Who-oa!)

[The Bridge and Solo go in here somewhere]

There's danger yet (and they should know it)
in trying to forget identity.
There's one thing that can cause the very end of us all: analogy.

That endless, empty space that is our whole entire race is gonna fall (and analogy is the cause).
No turning back, when everyone around is exactly you.
(Who-oa!)
Who-oa!


1Just to clear it up, I don’t mean spirit, as in “soul,” but like “energy, or verve”
2The stuff in parentheses is sung in background.
3The "Who-oa's" are added for a bit of umph. I've found that umph is almost never a bad thing.

no_way
09-12-2006, 01:52 PM
91 songs? Wow, I wish I could write as much as you do. Now with school it's quite impossible for me to sit and write. Good lyrics, I like them very much

randman21
09-12-2006, 02:22 PM
91 songs? Wow, I wish I could write as much as you do. Now with school it's quite impossible for me to sit and write. Good lyrics, I like them very much

Thankies:D I have 91, but I've been at it since 2003, so it's not THAT much.

ninthlayer
09-12-2006, 02:27 PM
SDawg: Yo TBizzle, show them how we spin this shit!
(TBizzle scratches with mad skill)
lolololololololololololol* party tymen!
(bitchin' guitar solo)
Yo yo yo yo yo yo yo, ur all fags and gay.
(Drum solo: approximately 4 minutes long)
(Flute interlude)
(Trombone solo)
~fin.

*pronounced laullaullaul etc.

randman21
09-12-2006, 04:00 PM
Haha!

...

no_way
09-12-2006, 05:08 PM
SDawg: Yo TBizzle, show them how we spin this shit!
(TBizzle scratches with mad skill)
lolololololololololololol* party tymen!
(bitchin' guitar solo)
Yo yo yo yo yo yo yo, ur all fags and gay.
(Drum solo: approximately 4 minutes long)
(Flute interlude)
(Trombone solo)
~fin.

*pronounced laullaullaul etc.

BEST*SONG*EVAH!!

SkunkIt
09-12-2006, 05:13 PM
I've actually wrote alot of songs and poems, but usally they're just for fun.

Now this is a stupid song, but I came up with it when I was bored. :P


1, 2, 3, Fuck!

There was an angry dragon
It was killing everyone
and deep within the village
the people asked what was wrong
They looked and saw some fire
and heard alot of screams
Here comes the angry dragon
could this be a bad dream?

The knights pulled out their swords
and charged and then attacked
only to be fired by the dragon that fought back
and then they screamed and burned in the flames of the night
the villagers were scared, but some attempted to fight
Punching the dragon and then stoning him to the floor
the poor dragon got scared, ran away but came back for more
He ate a couple of children and stepped on a woman's long hair
He killed some angry villagers and gave the village a scare

*accordian solo*

Oi! Oi! Oi!

the villagers were very angry, so they made a mob
threw their torches at the dragon, but the dragon did not stop
untill a man took out his gun and shot him in the balls
The dragon started crying, got mad and burned the mob

*Long accordian solo*

Then a small child showed up in a tank
shot the dragon in the heart and blew his chest to shreds
The dragon got pissed and stepped on the tank
The child was now dead and the dragon was fine
His skin grew back like It always does and then the dragon came back
To the village now the dragon was agressively mad
So he burned and killed everything in sight untill there was no village left
So don't fuck with a dragon or you are gonna die
The dragon was triumphant and celebrated in the night

*accordian solo*

don't fuck with a dragon or you're gonna die!
die die die die die die die die die die die die die
motherfucker
you're gonna die!

*Hysterical laughing*

no_way
09-12-2006, 05:24 PM
I laughed out loud near the end of the song hahahahahahaha, awesome!

DON'T FUCK WITH A DRAGON OR YOU'RE GONNA DIE DIE DIE DIEE!!!!!!!!!!

Nina
09-14-2006, 10:20 AM
Since I have a lot of time and am bored to death, I thought I could give you my opinion on the lyrics that were posted.

"Crying Away" by no_way:
the lyrics lack a specific pattern/rhythm but that's not a big deal since it was written for a song and isnt a poem in itself.
There are a few grammatical errors but I could be wrong. However there are definitely a couple lines that dont sound "right".
Examples: Should I hide I’m sad??? // It’s hard this crying away!

"The Dance" by Joy:
nice rhythm, very simple (a little too simple for my taste but that doesnt lower the quality of it). It kind of reminds me on Björk lyrics, because all lines seem to be connected, like they are scraps of poetry. I like the theme.

"Missile Streich" by XYlophonetreeZ:
Very amusing. I like how you used a German word, too :P I can totally imagine it to be a braindead metal song. Are the lyrics based on an already existing song? It sounds like it because the lyrics flow perfectly. If that was 100% your own work, I'll give you lots of credit for that.

"Death And Rejection" by Bloodstains:
Very, very cliche. I can understand that this song/poem might mean a lot to you personally, but as a poem it's not even decent.

"Drifting" by 0r4ng3:
Sounds like a nice, solid song. The words are also a little cliche but it is difficult to find new words to describe this specific subject matter, I give you that. But what fascinates me is how straight forward this song is. It might not be the most delightful piece of art I have ever read but I can imagine you getting there once you are older and do that for a longer time.

I got tired of this.

Sunny
09-14-2006, 10:23 AM
i like the mental image of a "triumphant dragon celebrating in the night". like with a party hat and balloons and confetti. eeeehehe.

Llamas
09-14-2006, 11:25 AM
while procrastinating homework, as usual, I thought I'd post a song. This is the one I wrote most recently last may... I only write when I'm really upset, pissed or depressed, and I haven't been in quite a while.

A little background is that this, as all my songs, is a true story... about a guy who was a complete asshole and totally destroyed my sense of trust. The song is through the guy's perspective up until the line "but this isn't my song", at which point it changes to my perspective.

The Lead

Look at me
I made you believe every word I said
Now look at you
Your trust is so ridiculous
Ridiculous

How do you feel
When I tear your heart in two?
I leave you bleeding
After I meticuously dug
Through your soul

Whoa, I took my shots
You didn’t see through me
And then I walked away
I hope you’re watching me as I hold her

What I say
Is it just some more deceit?
Now what I do
You were like a dog to me
We’ll never be

I’ll take my sweet time
Don’t you love suspense?
I know you do
Especially when
It kills you
It’s killing time

Lie, in defeat
I might as well kick you
Cause you’re down, anyway
Could I care now about your bruises?

Life in a book
That’s just what this was
This tale took
Three and a half years to write
And now I’ve signed

You’ll wait for me
I really think you won’t
I’m screwing up
My friends all tell me that I’m wrong
But this isn’t my song

My mind, it lies in shambles
There with my heart
How could I let this be?
I knew this would happen…
I knew this would happen…
Did you know this would happen…?

0r4ng3
09-14-2006, 11:32 AM
About "Drifting":

I wrote the entire thing in about 10 minutes. I was basically just writing lyrics around a punk-esque guitar track that I made up. If I had spent more time on it, it would probably be a bit better.

Whiplash
09-14-2006, 11:38 AM
In the darkness:


Why dose this feeling burn
everytime in turn
Away from this rhyme
Is there something i should learn?

In the darkness of my feeling
There's a meaning to my world
Should i always be cealing
Or is there more to this?

Why are they here
the shades in my sight
I have no idea
I dosen't feel right

How he would try
to take them away
The phantoms are my
Defenition of life

=chorus=

But we where just friends
At least thats what i thought
Now i think something different
Why they are here
Here to make me feel
What real and whats not.

Whiplash
09-14-2006, 11:43 AM
Void


Walking all alone
Not knowing where to go
Walking for all times
making up these Rhymes

Drowning in my tears
Dying of these fears
No one is to blame
We died without a name

chorus
I'm going down tonight
Walking in this void
Taking it on my own
Its my weight to bare

All alone tonight
Tremble of this fright
Scaring only me
What the hell can it be?!

I am not ashamed
walking in the name
off al that i right
Its gives me all my might.

randman21
09-14-2006, 12:17 PM
About the "The Lead":

I likey.:) It's not often that you come across a song where speaker is meant to be seen as an asshole. You know, I just noticed how most of the verses start with questions. I especially like that, but I think it'd help the flow of it to start them all that way. And maybe a more consistant rhyme scheme...?

T-6005
09-14-2006, 12:20 PM
Ugh, I can't believe I'm going to do this. I am a horrible, horrible lyricist, and I generally only write lyrics because I need words to put to a song. They generally take me about 2 minutes to write - I'm just that impatient to just get something down, and somehow I never get around to writing actual lyrics.

The Hard Way
Verse 1:
Most for the now and a little for the later
Save it for the time you won't be around
Doesn't matter then, pills are crushed,
Can't you be around to enjoy another one?

Chorus:
Welcome to it, (The hard way)
Welcome to it. (The hard way)

Verse 2:
Let's go the path of least resistance
We know where the man is,
Slide on down to the happy place,
I need more of myself right about now

Chorus
Bridge
Chorus

And here's another, since I'm already far into embarrassing myself.
Song for a Rainy Day
Verse 1
I'll lie awake, and contemplate
What's happening outside
It's difficult, not impossible,
To leave this bedside.

Chorus
They're all drowning out there,
It's a sorry state of affairs

Verse 2
I'll lie awake, and contemplate,
What's happening outside,
Too easy, Too easy,
To stay inside

randman21
09-14-2006, 12:34 PM
Sometimes, I write songs that sound kinda the music I'd been listening to that day, or week, or whatever. This was written during my Blink 182/MxPx phase.



"Make Nice"


[Verse 1]
A frog in my throat whenever I try to speak my mind.
I'm staying afloat, only because I stay in line.

[Verse 2]
A chill in my bones passes whenever I disagree.
I know that you’re wrong, but the tension’s killing me.

[Prechorus thingy]
And I know the night goes by and my views are stuck inside,
but I think it’s better, much better than having to speak my mind.

[super-punx (!!!!11) speed kicks in]


[Verse 3]
So, you stepped on my dog
and you ran over my cat.
No problem at all,
‘cause I forgive you just like that.

[Verse 4]
She broke up with me,
and got with my friend that same day.
Before she gave back the key,
she scratched up my car, but it’s okay.

[Prechorus]
No, really, it’s alright.
I always wanted my car personalized.
Besides, she's right.
I really can be a “queer” sometimes.


[Chorus]
I make nice all the time,
even when I'm absolutely right.
You can walk over me.
I'm your personal mat.
Turn me over to see
The “Welcome” on my back.

[Bridge]
Somehow, I don’t think that it's so good to hold back,
but, then again, what’s emotional health anyway?
One day, I might just snap and kill everyone around,
but we can cross that bridge when we come to it. I'm okay now.

I make nice all the time,
even when I'm absolutely right.
You can walk over me.
I'm your personal mat.
Turn me over to see
The “Welcome” on my back.

randman21
09-14-2006, 12:46 PM
Song for a Rainy Day...


I like the idea a lot. If the verses and chorus were a lot longer, it'd be pretty awesome.

no_way
09-14-2006, 02:37 PM
The Lead
I liked it, some parts doesn't sound so good in my mind, but I didn't hear the song itself.


In the darkness
A little too common, but not bad.

Void
Reminded me of "Boulevard of Broken Dreams" by Green Day :mad: :(

The Hard Way
The chorus was the only part I didn't think was exceptionally good

Song for a Rainy Day


Also, very good

Llamas
09-14-2006, 04:34 PM
About the "The Lead":

I likey.:) It's not often that you come across a song where speaker is meant to be seen as an asshole. You know, I just noticed how most of the verses start with questions. I especially like that, but I think it'd help the flow of it to start them all that way. And maybe a more consistant rhyme scheme...?

I appreciate the feedback! I don't like to have rhyme schemes in most of my songs... that one only has 2 lines that rhyme. I'll record the song at some time and let you hear it, it's not meant to rhyme.

randman21
09-14-2006, 04:40 PM
I appreciate the feedback! I don't like to have rhyme schemes in most of my songs... that one only has 2 lines that rhyme. I'll record the song at some time and let you hear it, it's not meant to rhyme.


Ohhhh. That's awesome. No rhyme scheme would broaden one's possibilities. Well, I'll be glad to hear it. Juuust let me know...

T-6005
09-14-2006, 05:32 PM
The chorus was the only part I didn't think was exceptionally good
The song will be up in a few days online - I'll PM it to you then, you tell me what you think.

no_way
09-19-2006, 03:41 PM
The song will be up in a few days online - I'll PM it to you then, you tell me what you think.

Thanks, I'll be waiting

T-6005
09-19-2006, 03:42 PM
Thanks, I'll be waiting
Well, since you just wrote here - check the end of the thread called Me in Other Bands. I just put the song up.

no_way
09-19-2006, 03:43 PM
No PM? :(

I'm going

coke_a_holic
09-19-2006, 04:02 PM
I wrote this to creep my friends out! I was kind of proud of it, but at the same time, disgusted at my morbidity. It's a little surreal and full of just... nonsense that I had fun confusing my friends with! =)

Her tears smack the gorund in a symphony of depression
His only hope is that she will spare a glance in his direction
She sees him in the corner of a ghost-town drugstore
Staring through the window with a tacit rapport

The craters left in the earth left by her tears are impressed
By the fashion of the barrel against that man's chest
He screams a muddled gargle through the dusty window pane
And he pulls a trigger leaving lead imbedded in his veins
She turns around as her mouth cries out in vain
For the man she loved yet never knew is in vicious pain
She runs inside to save him from such a demise
Yet realizes she's somewhere else, lost in time

As sweat and blood and tears evaporate on her cold clammy flesh,
She wakes up with a start and feels a bass drum in her chest.
A sigh of relief and fear for her lover's life,
She looks over at her man, in his heart a knife.

randman21
09-21-2006, 06:19 AM
Imagery=beautiful

Very well-written.

Whiplash
09-26-2006, 06:08 AM
Look at my eyes
Look at my face
Look at my tears falling into grace

Take some of this joy i've been given
And just throw it away
Make my life worth reliving
And just give it back someday

Look at this pain
Look at this fear
Please take me back my dear

Share some of this pain i've deliverd
And just make it alright
I see in your eyes you have shiverd
Right into the night.





Its not done just yet, I made it up a second ago. And i don't have a name for it either.
Please give an opinion, I want to know if i should continu writting it?

wheelchairman
09-26-2006, 01:59 PM
To the toon of Beans Beans the magical Fruit

Aids Aids
the best disease
the more you fuck
the more you please
controlling the gays
with noticeable ease

That ladies and gentlemen, is a Wheelchairman original.

JoY
09-27-2006, 05:19 AM
Nina, I didn't see you commented on my "song"! thank you for what you said & thank you for taking the time to read it & give critique. =)

darea
11-27-2006, 12:54 PM
Hardcore

Like you must have noticed, my speach comes out of the dark
I speak of liberty, equality, I give speaches of hope
In my texts, the world is really wonderful
Nobody dies in the worst evil sufferings
My words are metaphores that come out with no effort
My rhymes float peacefully in the sky, like butterflies, it's high
It's extraordinary the very few lies I can say
The color of my subjects are so obscure that you will never escape
If you enter my spirit just 1 second, your life comes to an end
Cause it's an open door to all the windows of hell, you'll burn eternally
I start slowly but in a small amount of time you start to cry
You cry like a child, you're trapped, you're scared
You'd like to escape,but you know it's impossible
You've been chosen for a new series of massacres, you've become my target
And no one in the world will save you from my dear damages

Refrain :
I can't stop writting hardcore
I'm here to massacre you, encore et encore
Take you in the winding and tenebrous tunnels
Of the underground, amongst many dead bodies

I'm hardcore your body will be hard before one tear can fall from your eye
Because you will already be decapitated by my glance as sharp as a blade
I slowly walk beside death and I'm glade about it
It has been my accomplice for centuries and gives painfull wounds
To whoever dares crossing it's road, I'm here to stirr up the blisters
I'm the murderer who haunts your spirit in silance, I'm sure
To succeed in my macabre work of death, I beat you up so much
That your skin falls in shreds, multilated, you've lost
Got no more courage, smashed by rage itself, with no problem
In my hands you're a puppet with a deathly pale face
You're full of anguish, the arrival of death has traumatises you
You're just an abstract image that I can bend and mould as I want
You're a miserable guinea pig that I use for my machavelian experiances

Refrain :
I can't stop writting hardcore
I'm here to massacre you, encore et encore
Take you in the winding and tenebrous tunnels
Of the underground, amongst many dead bodies

All the greatest wizards can try to confront me if they have the courage
But they are already warned that evil spells reign around me
My thoughts carved on the paper are more and more negative
My spirit is like a book of stephen king, with no prerogative
You won't find your way out by turning a page
You'll be unceasingly chases by the beast, my advice : run
Don't turn back, who knows what monster is hiding in the dark?
Waiting for a juicy pray that's trying to escape in the darkness
Now that I have warned you enough, I'll let you think about it
Are you capable to confront me or are your legs going to collapse
It's you who has to tell me, I'm waiting for your answer, come on
Tell me what I'm supposed to do to calm down
To stop saying all these insanities that don't do anything else but fuck you
I need to be released from all this cruelty that I'm tangled in

randman21
11-27-2006, 01:36 PM
Well, I guess there wouldn't be much to say, except I like it..."Hardcore".

It's really long. Lot of words. Must be rap. :)

darea
11-27-2006, 01:37 PM
lol yeah its rap

darea
12-04-2006, 07:06 AM
Just wrote this yesterday after watching the movie silent hill

Scared of Love

Don’t mind a ghost
It won’t scare me
I’d rather it be my guest
Than I be your trophy
Push me on a plank
I’ll jump with the sharks
Be ripped to shreds
Better than burn my heart
Don’t give a fuck
If I scare you
Maybe you should duck
When I embrace you
What you don’t know
Is that love is a trap
As soon as I lay my eyes on you
You’ll forget where you are on the map

You are love and you I hate
I’m scared of love, it is my fate
Bring me all the ghouls of your hometown
Won’t be as bad as love bringing me down

I’m tired of arguing
So just behave
If you want my love
Well you must be brave
I have a special state of mind
You should be aware of what’s behind
Don’t dare betray me
I never forget
I’ll always be with you
No time for you to regret
The ocean is huge
But there is no refuge
As soon as love strikes
We’ll both be pierced on spikes

You are love and you I hate
I’m scared of love, it is my fate
Bring me all the ghouls of your hometown
Won’t be as bad as love bringing me down

The more things we have in common
The more dangerous it will be, so come on
Show me what you can do
And I’ll see if I like it
Too late to hesitate
The virus has already hit us both
You might think that you can just get away
But from this thing, I swear there is no way
So just relax, make yourself comfortable
Don’t shiver if I think you are eatable
I’ll take a bite
I guess it might hurt
But it’s all for the best
Are you ready for the test?

Sinister
12-04-2006, 07:25 AM
That's pretty good, although the topic lacks originality.

darea
12-04-2006, 07:28 AM
thanks, I wasnt trying to be original, I just had the words in my head and had to write them down

randman21
12-04-2006, 07:51 AM
I like it, too. It seems like you had some inspiration there.

randman21
12-04-2006, 08:47 AM
This one is called "Covenant?". It's one of my best songs overall, but, lyrically...meh.

A seething pool of disconsolate souls lies before me.
I put a foot in to test it out.
I know I'm in clear and present danger, with help far away as I thrash around,
but it’s something that I can’t rest without.

Chorus:


When I ignore my standards, it all makes sense to me.
And when I look more closely, I feel you next to me.
Your visage is of darkness, concealed by brilliant scheme.
If I try to depart this, when will I cease to be?


As I stand gazing in this massive pit for the downtrodden,
it’s tempting me more every minute.
I'm promised secular wealth again, but if I concede, I’ll be one of them.
I guess I'm damned any way you spin it.

Bridge:

Must I go with categorical light?
Or will such avarice claim my life?
Must I be doomed to have to choose between happiness now and forevermore?

When I ignore my standards, it all makes sense to me.
And when I look more closely, I feel you next to me.
Your visage is of darkness, concealed by brilliant scheme.
If I try to depart this, when will I cease to be?

{[Guitar Solo]}

no_way
12-25-2006, 04:19 PM
I loved darea's lyrics. Keep working!

darea
12-26-2006, 12:55 AM
I loved darea's lyrics. Keep working!



thanks:)

I liked that song randman keep posting, Id like to hear it too...

don't know what covenant means though

darea
12-29-2006, 05:37 AM
Here is another one, pretty shitty I guess but want to post it anyway.

Want a guy

Can't take that pseudo godfather anymore
He was great but now I want more
Might have found the most awesome guy
Won't let him go, don't ask me why
As sweet as an angel, tender and ripe
I'm the devil and gonna take a bite
He won't manage to escape my games
They'll be many and Ive got my aims
The details I leave for your imagination
You get ready for the confrontation

Want a guy who can share my thoughts
Want a guy who can share my dreams
Want a guy who can share the music I like, like the offspring
I want you and the joy you'll bring

I cant wait as long as it takes
For you to come and open the gates
Of my kingdom of heaven and hell
I might pick a few fruits on the way
While I'm waiting for you to come my way
But don't worry, I know what I want
I can be angry, I can be mean
I can even enjoy it, that's just being me
As soon as I need to show that I care
I ripen, and open to show that Im there
Meanness becomes sweetness and my hunger shows
to the one I desire, my love fucking grows

Want a guy, I have one in mind
If it doesn't work well I won't be blind
Can go back to my ex if I'm feeling desperate
But I'm not, it's better staying seperate

Sin Studly
12-29-2006, 05:52 AM
Self-inflicted forearm scars would make a more efficient method of showcasing your faggotry.

darea
12-29-2006, 06:07 AM
you're the faggot, Id prefer inflicting YOU the scars than do it to myself

khaaaaan
12-29-2006, 06:08 AM
Uh! Ouch! Are you gonna stand there and just take that Sin?

Sin Studly
12-29-2006, 06:10 AM
you're the faggot, Id prefer inflicting YOU the scars than do it to myself

I already read your poetry ; you've inflicted scars on me that'll last a lifetime.

the_GoDdEsS
12-29-2006, 06:13 AM
Want a guy who can share my music
Want a guy who can share my dreams
Want a guy who can share the offspring


Hahahaha, I really hope you did not mean the band.

Aws, emoez.

H1T_That
12-29-2006, 06:17 AM
Hahahaha, I really hope you did not mean the band.

Aws, emoez.

BAHAHAHA, if he/she means the band, that is eternally retarded.

darea
12-29-2006, 06:24 AM
well okay Im eternally retarded for you guys, I meant the music not the band, you can continue laughing your ass off I dont fucking care!!!!!!

H1T_That
12-29-2006, 06:25 AM
well okay Im eternally retarded for you guys, I meant the music not the band, you can continue laughing your ass off I dont fucking care!!!!!!

But you said "the offspring"

Sin Studly
12-29-2006, 06:27 AM
1) You meaning sharing the music of the band is fucking pathetic and retarded, and we're laughing at that.

2) You meaning sharing the band, as in ; sexually or something, is so retardedly disturbing it did not even cross our minds until you denied it because we're not sick and deviant enough to think that.

darea
12-29-2006, 06:31 AM
well okay my song sucks, who cares?

the_GoDdEsS
12-29-2006, 06:32 AM
Oh God, are you really 23? I just died.