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Alison
12-06-2011, 07:29 AM
Once again, I am writing an essay, and there is always that one bastard of a sentence.

So, I don't really want to say 'indebted to' or 'owes thanks to', because that sounds really positive, and just doesn't seem to fit in right. Also, the last part seems to be a bit awkward too, or does it? I don't know!

The status and treatment of women in the Early Modern Period is indebted to a number of different societies; those of the Ancient Greeks and Romans, which those during the Renaissance were trying to replicate and reproduce; and of the Christian society of the Middle Ages, out of which they were emerging.

ad8
12-06-2011, 10:53 AM
The status and treatment of women in the Early Modern Period was brought about by a number of different societies; those of the Ancient Greeks and Romans, which those during the Renaissance were trying to replicate and reproduce; and of the Christian society of the Middle Ages, out of which they were emerging.
would this work?

Baldwin
12-06-2011, 11:20 AM
Evolved from, descended out of, bears influence of, etc.

And use past tense for the last part. "From which they emerged".

edit ; Also, "Christendom" works better than "Christian society" since it means exactly that.

Alison
12-07-2011, 04:27 AM
Thank you very much!

Jakebert
12-07-2011, 04:08 PM
Shocking that this is the thread that'd bring you out of retirement.