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    Once again, I am writing an essay, and there is always that one bastard of a sentence.

    So, I don't really want to say 'indebted to' or 'owes thanks to', because that sounds really positive, and just doesn't seem to fit in right. Also, the last part seems to be a bit awkward too, or does it? I don't know!

    The status and treatment of women in the Early Modern Period is indebted to a number of different societies; those of the Ancient Greeks and Romans, which those during the Renaissance were trying to replicate and reproduce; and of the Christian society of the Middle Ages, out of which they were emerging.

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    The status and treatment of women in the Early Modern Period was brought about by a number of different societies; those of the Ancient Greeks and Romans, which those during the Renaissance were trying to replicate and reproduce; and of the Christian society of the Middle Ages, out of which they were emerging.
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    Evolved from, descended out of, bears influence of, etc.

    And use past tense for the last part. "From which they emerged".

    edit ; Also, "Christendom" works better than "Christian society" since it means exactly that.
    Last edited by Baldwin; 12-06-2011 at 10:23 AM.

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    Thank you very much!

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